Alone – Friday Fictioneers – 2/15/13

Copyright David Stewart

Copyright David Stewart

There is fiction afoot! The roving band of fiction lovers known as the Friday Fictioneers returns for another curtain call. We love the chase of writing about scenes from around the world. This week’s prompt is based on a statue from Korea, supplied by David Stewart. I hesitated for a moment with this prompt, but decided to follow on the prompt from last week, Coming Home, which I chose to be about a returning veteran. I encourage you to re-read that post if this one makes no sense.


Genre: Realistic Fiction

No one knows how it is to be a vet.

Even when home pieces of you remain away. Part of me is behind in Korea where I served before Afghanistan. I remember this sculpture of a man alone. It is kind of how I feel now. I got off the plane last week and re-inserted myself with my family, yet I am still alone.

Just like I was when the Humvee exploded. At least in Korea I had Su Lee. She was the best thing about my two years in the country. If only she could come to the states.

About Joe Owens

Can you tell from my writing I love God? I hope so because that is what I want you to know most about me. I am also a writer who loves taking on fiction prompts and crafting a story. One day you will read my work in print. Until then enjoy it here! For free!
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16 Responses to Alone – Friday Fictioneers – 2/15/13

  1. muZer says:

    So moving and touching. Could really feel his emotions and loneliness. Great take on the prompt.

  2. sandraconner says:

    Nicely done, Joe. So many veterans have agonized over just this experience. I, too, applaud your use of the word “reinserted.” And the longing for Su Lee because she can understand some thing in a unique way adds an extra touch.

  3. rich says:

    in this line: “Even when home pieces of you remain away.” think about a comma after “home.” it gives a necessary pause to help stress the moment. loved the word choice of “reinserted.” it shows distance, and it had a military feel instead of a “home, family” feel. well done.

  4. Moving and touching. but this is how it can end up sometimes. In limbo between despair and joy ther is nothingness,

  5. Sandra says:

    I love this line,”Even when home pieces of you remain away.” It can be interpreted metaphorically and litrelly, and it is sad and deep both ways. Good one.

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