The first time I saw. . .
Here’s the catch: all of your 33 words must be one syllable each. We’re going low-brow on your this week. Or not. Can you class it up under these restrictions? Give us your best.
To clarify, we are giving you 5 words. We want another 33 from you, for a grand total of 38. – See more at: http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/#sthash.B4Q0KFRU.dpuf – See more at: http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/#sthash.QM8mVJZq.dpuf
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The first time I saw her my heart stopped and knees went weak. Her blue eyes were so clear, they pierced my soul. Her red lips were all I could dream of when my eyes closed each night.
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I want to point you flash fiction writers to another option. It is Flash in the Pan, where you write short fiction 50-150 words respectively to words chosen and posted each week. 250 responses will be collected and published by Redmund Productions. You can check the details at the following link: Flash in the Pan.
Awww. Lovely and romantic!
So pretty.
That is exactly how it is! Loved it.
Joe, I suspect you are a romantic and this sounds like experience. Good on both counts.
She must’ve been something special. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Romantic and brilliant! ♥
You are very kind Kathy! I felt inspired to write something with feeling. Thanks for reading and commenting.
This is the most romantic thing I’ve ever heard….So well chosen words and amazing emotions !
Very nice – I could totally feel the obsession taking root.
I love the contrasting use of colours and of eyes in this short piece. So much emotion in so few well-chosen words. But, on another note, you remarked earlier about there seemingly being only a small group of writers who were doing most of the winning. It is true that there are a group of writers who produce consistently excellent work, challenge after challenge. Therefore, it is no surprise that their names turn up more than once. However, if you were to click on my blog, you would see a Winner button there, too. So, lightning can strike anywhere at any time and, if I can pull out a win then anyone can. Chin up, my friend! I like your work on this post very much. Nothing like first love!!! 🙂