Hook’em Danno – Friday Fictioneers – 20 Sept

Sometimes when you see a picture you can easily get stuck on the first idea. I think this one surpasses that a bit.  I hope you get the Hawaii Five-O reference! Thanks to Rochelle for hosting and John Nixon for the picture this time.

 Fiction (98 words)

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“Mr. Wintersham I cannot thank you enough. Since you have been monitoring our shop the loss is non-existent.”

“Well, you know how it is. Folks see an old man with a cane and they think he is infirm.”

“I love the way you hook their ankle with it and flip them on their back!”

“It is a trick I learned long ago,” Wintersham replied as he twirled the cane in the air.

“You are appreciated,” the store owner said.

“No problem. Besides I have my eye on that looker in the window. She is playing hard to get!”

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About Joe Owens

Can you tell from my writing I love God? I hope so because that is what I want you to know most about me. I am also a writer who loves taking on fiction prompts and crafting a story. One day you will read my work in print. Until then enjoy it here! For free!
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17 Responses to Hook’em Danno – Friday Fictioneers – 20 Sept

  1. Dear Joe,

    Good one! The last line is a winner. 😀

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  2. Very fun story. Loss prevention people come in all types. Funny about the mannequin. I referred to her in my story too.

  3. paulmclem says:

    Last line makes the story. Good effort.

  4. cane is good for many things
    fun story

  5. elmowrites says:

    Heehee, a nice idea, Joe! If there’s one thing, I felt you could use contractions a bit more. Spelling out “it is” etc always feels a bit stilted to me.

  6. TheImaginator says:

    Great punch-line!

  7. I got the reference. Always liked that show a lot and I got a laugh out of imaging this old man tripping up would-be shop-lifters–literally.

    janet

  8. Adam Ickes says:

    The last line takes a good story and turns it into a great story. Well done.

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