Sometimes when you see a picture you can easily get stuck on the first idea. I think this one surpasses that a bit. I hope you get the Hawaii Five-O reference! Thanks to Rochelle for hosting and John Nixon for the picture this time.
Fiction (98 words)
“Mr. Wintersham I cannot thank you enough. Since you have been monitoring our shop the loss is non-existent.”
“Well, you know how it is. Folks see an old man with a cane and they think he is infirm.”
“I love the way you hook their ankle with it and flip them on their back!”
“It is a trick I learned long ago,” Wintersham replied as he twirled the cane in the air.
“You are appreciated,” the store owner said.
“No problem. Besides I have my eye on that looker in the window. She is playing hard to get!”
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lol. fun story
Good one! The last line is a winner. 😀
Very fun story. Loss prevention people come in all types. Funny about the mannequin. I referred to her in my story too.
Last line makes the story. Good effort.
cane is good for many things
Heehee, a nice idea, Joe! If there’s one thing, I felt you could use contractions a bit more. Spelling out “it is” etc always feels a bit stilted to me.
I got the reference. Always liked that show a lot and I got a laugh out of imaging this old man tripping up would-be shop-lifters–literally.
The last line takes a good story and turns it into a great story. Well done.