Hook’em Danno – Friday Fictioneers – 20 Sept

Sometimes when you see a picture you can easily get stuck on the first idea. I think this one surpasses that a bit.  I hope you get the Hawaii Five-O reference! Thanks to Rochelle for hosting and John Nixon for the picture this time.

 Fiction (98 words)

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“Mr. Wintersham I cannot thank you enough. Since you have been monitoring our shop the loss is non-existent.”

“Well, you know how it is. Folks see an old man with a cane and they think he is infirm.”

“I love the way you hook their ankle with it and flip them on their back!”

“It is a trick I learned long ago,” Wintersham replied as he twirled the cane in the air.

“You are appreciated,” the store owner said.

“No problem. Besides I have my eye on that looker in the window. She is playing hard to get!”

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About Joe Owens

Can you tell from my writing I love God? I hope so because that is what I want you to know most about me. I am also a writer who loves taking on fiction prompts and crafting a story. One day you will read my work in print. Until then enjoy it here! For free!
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17 Responses to Hook’em Danno – Friday Fictioneers – 20 Sept

  1. I liked it before the ending. Now I love it!

  2. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Joe,

    Seconding the contractural comments, so to speak. The conversation sounds stilted as written. Keep up the good work.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  3. That’s a great guard to have – but I think he’s getting his hope up a little high on rewards

  4. zookyworld says:

    Clever use of a cane — the hook isn’t just for pulling lame actors off stage any more. Danno, good luck with the looker in the window — you’re gonna need it!

  5. kz says:

    haha never underestimate a guy with a cane 🙂 good one

  6. JKBradley says:

    Maybe he’ll attempt to hook her by the ankle before long.

    Thanks!

  7. Sandra says:

    I agree with Jennifer about the contractions, but apart from that, nice take on the prompt.

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