If it is Sunday then it is time for Alastair’s Photo Fiction Prompt. Using between 100 and 200 words you spin a story out of the supplied photo. While you will feel justified to use the 1000 words the photo suggests, you must be strong and deny the urge. Alastair always gives us a great photo from which the words flow so easily.
Jimmy and his grandfather stood silent for several moments as they took in the sight of the crest for the great hero of the land. Grandfather had told and retold the story of Bernard the Great so many times Jimmy could recite them from memory. He never would in his grandfather’s presence because he loved his voice so much and the way the story resonated when his grandfather’s deep voice filled the air.
Grandfather could see Jimmy’s mind was at work as his hand traced the figures before him.
“Who is this?” Jimmy asked.
“That is Benny. He was Bernard’s younger brother. Benny loved Bernard more than anything else in the world. He begged Bernard not to go on this mission, because he knew he would not return,” Grandfather replied.
“But he went anyway?”
“He had to,” Grandfather said. “If not we would not be here today.”
Jimmy thought a little more and then a light bulb flashed and he looked up at his grandfather with utter disbelief.
“Yes, Jimmy, that was my brother, Bernard.”
I want to point you flash fiction writers to another options. It is Flash in the Pan, where you right short fiction 50-150 words respectively to words chosen and posted each week. Of the total submitted, 250 responses will be collected and published by Redmund Productions. You can check the details at the following link: Flash in the Pan.
Excellent twist at the end – well done!
A wonderful story. Grandfathers can often be a source of inspiration. Sometimes they are forgotten heroes. Your story has one that is both. Well told!
Terrific bit of story-telling in so few words.
I love stories like that one Joe, brings a tear to the eye. Great one loved it.
Great story. I love endings with revelations.
WOW!! That’s awesome. I love that twist at the end.