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You like the Friday Fictioneers huh? The partakers of the weekly challenge to describe a picture using only 100 words. We are a dedicated lot that grows by the week, It is an obsession we cannot hide, and cannot stop. See what you think about my latest attempt. The art work here, both sculpture and photograph is from Claire Fuller, a fabulous blogger in her own right. **************************************
Genre: Romantic Fiction
Elise stood back to look at her work. From the white cube she began with the form was slowly taking shape. She reviewed the photograph, the only link left with her long lost love. He promised to meet her at the dock so he could journey with her to the Promised Land. She begged her father to wait longer, but the ship’s horn announced the time was gone for waiting. The picture of him holding her was all she had left and it was fading from too much handling. She needed something more permanent until Renaldo made it to her.
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Dear Joe,
How sad that Elise missed the ship. I hope Renaldo will find her. I have to wonder if she made a wise choice. You left me with a lot of questions and wanting to know more.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Actually Renaldo missed the ship. The 100 words goes so fast it is hard to create and resolve simultaneously.
Ah…My bad. That makes more sense. I couldn’t imagine the father leaving his daughter. Duh. I’m back now.
I agree, it’s a challenge. But that’s the fun of it.
Thanks, Joe. Really a great story!
Aww, so romantic. I got that Elise made the ship but Renaldo didn’t. A lovely story.
Awww.. so sad he couldn’t come but like the hope in the end that she’s sculpting them and waiting for when he comes .. Great story..
Nicely done.
so sad, I love the image of the fading photograph needing to be replaced. Nice job.
Lucky her to have the talent to make such a remembrance. I would have had to just try to remember in my head as I wouldn’t even be able to draw him.
*sigh* I hope nothing happened to him… poor girl.
The secret is what happened to Renaldo. I create all sort of images, and it would be interesting to read his story…. Maybe next week.
Are you sure his absence was unplanned? With only one photograph sounds like a short courtship. Of course, Papa could have facilitated his tardy arrival–we need part two.
I’m afraid the sculpture will become all-too permanent…nice story
That’s sweet – I hope Reynaldo locates her wherever she’s going!
I’m wondering about the choice of names: Elise and Renaldo. One’s French-based, the other Spanish-based. Is this significant? Renaldo has missed the boat to the Promised Land. Will there be another? A story not quite resolved. At a crossroads. Good read.
Very nice job. Enjoyed it.
Perhaps I am all too confused, but is Elise waiting for her father or her lover? Wait… is her father the captain?
The thought I had was she was waiting for the ship to come to America with her family. She begged her father to let her wait for her lover, but the time for waiting was over. Now she pines for her lost love.
Hmm…that is tragic. Perhaps there will be a new love in her future?
i sure hope he makes it… sigh, probably not… sad romance well-told
Dear Joe,
Good story. if i may, will you allow me to suggest changing ‘square’ to ‘cube’ or ‘block’. Adds another dimension, so to speak, to your work.
Aloha,
Doug
I hope the photo lasts until he arrives. I found this a really touching tale. Well done.
Ah, lost love. Sad to say, most of us can relate to that on a personal level. I hope these soulmates meet up eventually.
very good..open to a lot of possibilities..
That kind of longing for someone is really powerful. So is she in the Promised Land now? Not still on the ship, I suppose.
I really like our take on this…i sure hope Renaldo gets to her eventually, very well done. Thanks so much for stopping by mine
A sweet endearing love between Elise and Renaldo comes to a sudden halt at the boat dock. How sad he could not be there in time to travel with her. I hope he meets up again with her. I was just a little confused about the picture she held in her hand of him ‘holding her.’ Was the picture of her and Renaldo or one of her father holding her as a child? I didn’t quite understand that part, but the story could certainly be developed more. I had to explain some of my story in more detail too this time around.
It is often more a challenge for writers to get a complete story down concisely in 100 words, than coming up with an idea for the photo prompt that works.
I do hope that Renaldo makes it too
Wonderful story.